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Borivoj Bukva (Croatia)

2.45 out of 3.00 points

Dimljaci nad
krovovima kuca i
jutro ljeta.

Chimneys
above house roofs
and the dawn of the Summer

Translated: Slobodan Milosevic

Judge's comment:The author has his style of drawing, and it is shown nicely. One thing troubles me is the semi-circular dark thing at the right bottom. I think it is unneccesary. The focal point of the drawing is already established at the two persons like things at the end of the road. This semi-circular things compete with the focal point. As for haiku, where is the Kire, or cutting? It just look like one continuous phrase broken in three lines.