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Origa (USA)

2.60 out of 3.00 points

translation by Ban'ya Natsuishi

Judge's comment: This is a well composed haiga in traditional style. Every element of the image is well excuted except the placement of the verse. It should be a little more above diagnally. Since the verse is hand-written, I suggest that you write the verse on a piece of paper and place it on the image, move it around to find the best location, and then actually write the verse down.